The story doesn't make much sense. The game doesn't explain or even hint at whatever the reason was that he killed his girl. It doesn't explain what he agreed to do for the "boss", nor does it explain why they wanted only her arm, but left the rest of the body to rot. It also makes very little sense why they would then send the cops after him at the end of it. There are just too many plot holes and too many things unanswered that you're expecting the player to accept without questions. It also relies on the player accepting the magical pill gimmick which are able to, somehow, make him see the dead girl as a robot; it's just not even remotely believable.
It's not horrible by the standards of a first game, but I am annoyed that there are so many slobbering all over you in the comments and telling you how great the game was without pointing out how utterly senseless the story is and I personally don't believe that people grow when all they hear from others is that they are great and have no flaws. A person needs to first learn what their flaws are to know what they need to do to become better and an artist needs to know which areas of their craft are the weakest if they are ever to make a masterpiece.
It looked good and had a good vibe, but the narrative is where you are showing that you are weakest.
Thank you for the detailed critique. Since this was a short experience, I focused heavily on the atmosphere and intentionally left the deep lore ambiguous. However, I completely understand why it feels like missing pieces to players who invest in the narrative.
The best part about your review was the plot holes you listed (the Boss, the missing arm, the origin of the pills, the motive,...) are exactly the points I am expanding on in the upcoming Prequel.
I appreciate you not just hyping up the game and actually pointing out the narrative. It helps me grow alot, with or without any critiques, I did take notes every weak "points" myself. Once again, truly thanks.
I enjoyed the game but it didn't have that feeling of "horror". Good story and gameplay with nice graphics but I personally felt like it needed a little bit more in the horror feel. Overall, good game!
Such a unique game. The story and setup is very strong. I'd liked to see more interactions or minigames with the robot though. Nonetheless, this is strong psychological horror and really impressive for your first game, good job!
I played this game on stream and loved it! An eerie atmosphere, good dialogue, and a twist. 10/10! My playthrough will be dropping tomorrow 7PM CST. twitch.tv/sublux_
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Really weird, but also really good at the same time.
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The story doesn't make much sense. The game doesn't explain or even hint at whatever the reason was that he killed his girl. It doesn't explain what he agreed to do for the "boss", nor does it explain why they wanted only her arm, but left the rest of the body to rot. It also makes very little sense why they would then send the cops after him at the end of it. There are just too many plot holes and too many things unanswered that you're expecting the player to accept without questions. It also relies on the player accepting the magical pill gimmick which are able to, somehow, make him see the dead girl as a robot; it's just not even remotely believable.
It's not horrible by the standards of a first game, but I am annoyed that there are so many slobbering all over you in the comments and telling you how great the game was without pointing out how utterly senseless the story is and I personally don't believe that people grow when all they hear from others is that they are great and have no flaws. A person needs to first learn what their flaws are to know what they need to do to become better and an artist needs to know which areas of their craft are the weakest if they are ever to make a masterpiece.
It looked good and had a good vibe, but the narrative is where you are showing that you are weakest.
Thank you for the detailed critique. Since this was a short experience, I focused heavily on the atmosphere and intentionally left the deep lore ambiguous. However, I completely understand why it feels like missing pieces to players who invest in the narrative.
The best part about your review was the plot holes you listed (the Boss, the missing arm, the origin of the pills, the motive,...) are exactly the points I am expanding on in the upcoming Prequel.
I appreciate you not just hyping up the game and actually pointing out the narrative. It helps me grow alot, with or without any critiques, I did take notes every weak "points" myself. Once again, truly thanks.
Felt nice and creepy vibes, felt nervous the whole time. And I hate the boss!
I enjoyed the game but it didn't have that feeling of "horror". Good story and gameplay with nice graphics but I personally felt like it needed a little bit more in the horror feel. Overall, good game!
Absolutely amazing game. Even more impressive that this is your first! Keep up the amazing work
i def enjoyed this game good work!
the story hit me hard <3
Great game and the story was good. That ending though was kinda sad.
Wasnt expecting the ending but it was a really solid game
Great game really enjoyed it definitely looking forward to play more of your games
This was fun I hope to see more stuff like this from you
Honestly was not expecting that ending I had something else mind that was going to happen.
hi, the environment was perfect and story telling nailed the psychological horror.
good game.
Astonishing and Lovely game, Great Storytelling. Dahlia reminds me of someone.
The atmosphere. The Story. The Vibe. Its just everythinng that is perfect in proportion. Keep creating games my guy..
What's the name of the piano song that plays when you are with Dahlia in the restaurant with the cake?
you can look up "JRPG Piano" on opengameart.
Thank you!
Damn...did not expect this game to be that dark haha. Great game and keep up the good work! I do like this game
HIGHLY RECOMMEND
Do you like horror games where you think "WTH IS GOING ON?" Then this the perfect game for you.
I played this game on stream and loved it! An eerie atmosphere, good dialogue, and a twist. 10/10! My playthrough will be dropping tomorrow 7PM CST. twitch.tv/sublux_
Loved this game. Creepy environment, great twist that left you thinking. Keep up the good work! (game 2)
No me esperaba ese final. Buenisimo juego con una direccion de arte muy interesante
This was a great game!! I had a good time playing. The story was interesting and had a great ending.
This was such an amazing story. I didn't expect the ending at all, which the developer did a wonderful job in. Totally recommend. Great game!
It was a really compelling story and then that ending just caught me off guard.
Amazing!This was amazing! Slow starting but man that twist! I had a blast playing holy moley!
this was a really nice game :")
sickest adventure game